2013年2月28日星期四

In-class writing: Narrative

A Piece of Summe


My image of summer is green. Everything is fresh and vivid in this hot season. Inside my open air conditioning room, I may sit in front of my wood desk, doing mountainous of homework for the whole summer vacation and eating juicy watermelon which has been in refrigerator for half an hour. My cat is in her sweet dream, standing by my side silently. I can feel the warmth from her white fuzzy clothes. The quiet room is filled with sunshine, which seems can melt me. I stop writing and think about the appointment with my friends in the afternoon. We may drink fruit juice together by the seaside and chew the ice from our cups. A cool breeze blows, bringing a burst of fresh smell from the quite sea. Our naked legs beneath the short skirts enjoy the soft greetings of summer winds.

3 条评论:

  1. I really like this piece of writing! Reading this made me feel like it's actually summer! I like how you've touched on the 5 senses: sight(mountains of homework, watermelon,etc), taste (eating juicy watermelon), touch (cool breeze), and smell (smell of the sea). This is my ideal summer too, but too bad in Hong Kong it mostly rains in summer :( Makes me miss New Zealand summer :(

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  2. oh, I really feel like it's summer after reading your essay. I think it's good to drink a cool drink and go to the sea to enjoy a summer day. You make me hope that the summer can come faster. :D

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  3. very detailed description, which lead your readers into the real summer situation. especially for the juicy watermelon and the cat, I cannot agree more^^ hope you can have a nice summer vacation(a one without homework~

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